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Interview with Sherlock Holmes

Host: Welcome everyone! Today I, Emily Wilson, will be your host. I am most honored to introduce our guest, Sherlock Holmes, the iconic figure who shaped our idea of how detectives look like [k3: incorrect construction] what detectives look like, work, and act. Mr. Holmes solved numerous cases and is quite renowned all over the world [k3: redundant] worldwide. So, Mr. Holmes, how are you finding the modern world?

Sherlock Holmes: Yes, thank you. The pleasure is all mine. Well, the most intriguing thing about modern London is the metropolis itself. I would have imagined [k4: incorrect conditional] had imagined it would evolve beyond my imagination [k3: tautology] expectations, and yet, it is one of the most unpleasant places I've visited. / I had imagined it would develop in ways beyond my wildest expectations. It's such a brilliant invention [k3: unclear reference] The city itself is a remarkable creation, and yet, it looks like the government has no intention of modernizing it.

Host: Oh yes, it is a very interesting point [k3: unnatural phrasing] that is an interesting perspective. For such a popular public transport, it sure hasn't evolved at all [k3: overly informal] it certainly has not advanced. Now, I am very curious about your career choice. What would you be if not a detective?

Sherlock Holmes: I have not thought about that at all, Ms. Wilson. Also, congratulations on your divorce! [k3: inappropriate in context] I see you have recently undergone a life change. Well, I suppose I would be a politician. I find mind games exciting, and somebody has to keep Mycroft on his toes, yes?

Host: Oh wow! How did you know [k3:wrong word] learn / find out about my divorce?

Sherlock Holmes: Well, the tan line on your ring finger suggests that you’ve only recently stopped wearing a wedding ring. It was a fair assumption to make.

Host: You truly are amazing, Mr. Holmes. What would you say your favorite case is and why?

Sherlock Holmes: It has to be, as my dear friend Watson has named it, The Adventure of the Norwood Builder. It really was a supposedly perfect crime—hot for the culprit’s attempts to perfect it even more. [k3: unclear and awkward phrasing] especially given the culprit’s efforts to refine it further. It really shows a glimpse into the labyrinth of the human mind.

Host: That is very interesting indeed. I immensely enjoy the titles that Dr. Watson came up with [k1: informal] created for your cases.

Sherlock Holmes: Oh yes, he is very imaginative.

Host: Well, Mr. Holmes, I would like to ask you one last question. What advice would you give to aspiring detectives who want to follow in your footsteps?

Sherlock Holmes: To rely less on technology and artificial intelligence. The crimes of humankind should be solved by humans, not by robots. Always remember that every small detail matters.

Host: Thank you very much for this honor. Your insights were most welcome.

Sherlock Holmes: My pleasure.

Socialization issues_infographics analysis

1. Nowadays, modern technology allows/ provides access to almost any kind of information daily. Technology allows [k3: repetition] digital advancements grant access to almost any kind of information and resources needed, which can serve as a substitute for social interaction. Modern technology allows [k3: repetition] innovations enable for [k4: unnecessary preposition] people to have remote jobs, which drastically reduces spontaneous socialization. / With the advancement of modern technology, individuals can access nearly any type of information daily, reducing spontaneous social interaction.

2. The overall lifestyle of people has changed with more interests that concern only one person instead of several. We can prove this by [k1: inappropriate style—use passive voice in analytical writing] This can be demonstrated by comparing data before COVID-19 and after. Judging by the bar-chart, t~~here was already a decline before 2020~~ [k3: primitive wording] A decline had been evident even prior to 2020, although the numbers were still high. After COVID-19, the numbers were very low, but there was a noted increase over the last 3 years.

3. The decline in socializing greats [k5: spelling mistake] greatly affects mental well-being.

4. As a direct consequence, that the lack of social interactions weakens emotions bands [k3: incorrect collocation] emotional bonds, increases the feeling of loneliness, and etc. [k3: redundancy—"etc." already implies "and"] and isolation. / A decline in social interactions erodes emotional connections, heightens loneliness, and fosters isolation.

5. Conversely, regular communication boosts empathy and connection, develops emotional intelligence, and is generally good for mental health. / On the other hand, regular interaction fosters empathy, strengthens social bonds, and enhances emotional intelligence. / Meanwhile, maintaining active social engagement nurtures emotional well-being, deepens interpersonal relationships, and supports psychological resilience.

6. How can people and communities reverse this trend? [k1: no introduction to the question—should be smoothly integrated] An important question to consider is how people and communities can reverse this trend. / A crucial consideration is the methods available for people and communities to counteract this decline in socialization.

7. There are many possibl [k5: spelling mistake] possible solutions to this problem. In work places [k3: incorrect word choice—"workplace" is one word] In workplaces, team-bonding activities must be encouraged, and working from home made [k4: incorrect verb form—use passive voice] should be made less beneficial. There must be organised [k4: incorrect passive voice construction] More real-life events should be organized to bring people with shared interests together. Overall, socializing and communicating face-to-face must be encouraged by all means necessary. / Encouraging real-world interactions and discouraging excessive remote work can foster stronger social connections. / Promoting face-to-face engagement while limiting excessive remote work can enhance social cohesion and reinforce meaningful relationships.

Proposal: The Three Major Threats

On behalf of our town’s Ecological activist club [k5: capitalization needed for proper noun] Ecological Activist Club, I would like to suggest organizing exhibits in the local zoo so as [k1: overly informal connector] in order to illustrate the pressing problems that make [k3: inaccurate wording] lead to many species of animals lose [k4: incorrect verb form] losing their natural habitats. In these exhibits, should be shown [k4: incorrect word order in passive] the following three major threats should be presented: global warming, industrial pollution, poaching[k5: punctuation—comma needed], and poaching.

Global Warming

To illustrate the pressing problem of global warming, visitors of [k4: incorrect preposition] to the zoo could be shown a live-recording [k5: unnecessary hyphen+k4] live recordings /streams of animals most affected by this threat: polar bears, seals, etc. There may also be a display of statistics, showcasing the yearly birth rate of these animals in comparison to [k3: awkward phrasing] comparison with previous decades.

Industrial Pollution

To illustrate / highlight this threat, the visitors [k3: unnecessary definite article] visitors would be shown photos of animals who had died or became [k4: inconsistent tense use] have died or become sick because of the industrial pollution[k3: redundancy]industrial waste poisoning their habitats, food, and water. They may also be encouraged by the staff to donate to several organizations who [k4: relative pronoun misuse] which/that work with animals that had [k4: incorrect tense] have been affected by the industrial pollution[k3: redundancy]these pollutants.

Poaching

To illustrate/expose the problem of poaching, visitors of zoo [k4: missing article] to the zoo could be shown [k1- how?] the number of animals per year that had died [k4: awkward phrasing and wrong tense] that die annually because of poachers. It must also be said how [k3: awkward phrasing] should also be explained how killing even several [k3: incorrect quantifier] a few animals can affect the whole ecosystem of the forest, lake etc[k5: punctuation—comma and period needed], etc.

Conclusion

It is of most importance [k3: awkward phrasing] of utmost importance to educate people about the three major threats to the wild, so that measures can be taken in order to [k3: redundancy] to solve these problems.

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Boston Tea Party_Story

I was a successful merchant during those troubling times.

My wife, Samantha, once had described [k4: unnecessary past perfect] described me as a grizzly bear, referring to my towering figure and thick beard. I considered myself more of a sly fox who always knew which road would bring more [k3: collocation/degree] greater success. I had moved [k4: unnecessary past perfect in narrative] moved my family from England when it became apparent that the Great Isles [k1: stylistic choice — acceptable if meant as a subjective or emotional renaming of the British Isles] British Isles did not have fertile grounds from which you could grow a lucrative business [k3: unnatural collocation + k2: awkward phrasing] lacked the fertile ground on which one could build a lucrative business. So we found ourselves in America, the land that offered opportunities for everyone and had more territory than any other country [k2: exaggeration; stylistic adjustment] boasted vast territories. // …the land that promised opportunity for all.

I built my business and my life there. We lived in Boston, which was one of the biggest [k3: lexical choice] largest port cities in America. My trade prospered, and my daughters and sons grew up having faced [k4: aspect inconsistency — breaks parallelism with 'prospered'] facing no turmoils [k4: incorrect plural form] no turmoil at all. I feared, though, that everything was going to change. After the Crown made [k3: inaccurate verb choice] made the British East India Company the monopoly in selling tea to [k1: stylistic register — accurate meaning but informal phrasing for narrative voice] made the British East India Company the sole seller of tea to the American colonies, // granted the British East India Company a monopoly on the tea trade with the colonies // turned the British East India Company into the sole authorised seller of tea in the colonies, there were whispers of anger. I myself did not deal with tea, but my dear friend Tom did. His business suffered greatly from this act.

“This is preposterous! How dare those ungrateful nobles do this to us?” raged to me Tom [k4: incorrect word order and preposition — misdirected object of anger] Tom raged against the British nobles // Tom raged about the injustice // Tom raged against them one day.

“I agree with you, my friend, but what can we do?” I pondered.

“There have been talks [k4: wrong tense and number—'talk' uncountable] was talk about teaching those arrogant bastards a lesson! Trust me, there are going to be changes around here soon,” Tom told me vehemently [k3: lexical collocation — “told” doesn’t collocate naturally with “vehemently”] said vehemently // spoke with vehemence // declared hotly // exclaimed passionately . // "The folks are planning to give those arrogant bastards a taste of their own medicine,", Tom said vehemently.

I was afraid but hopeful. Would we finally have the freedom we had been craving for decades?

All of what Tom said had come true. [k2: awkward structure + k4: tense sequence] Everything Tom said came true. Some brave fellows boarded English ships here in Boston, filled with tea, and destroyed all of it [k2: vague reference] the whole cargo!

[k1: task achievement – insufficient development] The paragraph ends abruptly after describing the Boston Tea Party. The writer should elaborate on the hero’s reflections and life after the event — for instance, whether the rebellion affected his trade, his loyalty to Britain, or his hopes for independence.

// Possible continuation ideas: He might describe how British retaliation disrupted commerce // how he joined or supported the patriots secretly // how his perception of freedom deepened after witnessing the revolt // or how his family’s safety became uncertain in the wake of unrest.