Opinion

In my view, the interview reveals a truly insightful observation: to be an actor in sixteenth-century England one needed to be bold, loud and able to deal with stress.

I agree with this idea, because at that time theatres were on open air [k4/k3: grammatical mistake / collocation] in the open air and because of this fact [k3: awkward wording] this actors had to work despite noise and hum of an audience [k3: article / collocation] the noise and hum of the audience.

I believe this problem had been [k4: tense] was relevant for all performators [k3: wrong word] performers until microphones were invented.

For example, Russian poet Vladimir Mayakovskiy [k3: spelling / standard form] Mayakovsky used to read in front of crowds [k3: awkward wording — not natural for literary context] to large crowds and was good at it, because he had a strong voice, which some people compare to thunder [k3: tense inconsistency] compared to thunder[k5: punctuation — missing comma to close non-defining clause] , and a brave rebellious character [k3: awkward wording — missing punctuation / unnatural adjective sequence] brave, rebellious character, which helped him not to give up [k3: awkward wording+k1: style too low] helped him persevere when people found his works disgusting [k3: unnatural wording] found his works offensive and protested during a performance [k3: awkward / imprecise wording] protested during his performances. For example, the Russian poet Vladimir Mayakovsky used to recite his works before large crowds and was good at it because he had a strong voice, often compared to thunder, and a brave, rebellious character. These qualities helped him carry on even when audiences found his works disgusting and protested during his performances.

In conclusion, the fact that [k5: incomplete structure] it is clear that being a perfomator [k3: spelling / wrong word] performer required oratory skills and such personal treats [k3: wrong word] traits, as boldness and ability to resist of the pressure [k3/k4: collocation + grammar] the ability to resist the pressure of an audience [k3: article use] the audience.

Therefore, being a theatre actor, a singer or other playing-on-stage professional [k3: awkward phrasing] another stage performer is an objectively hard work [k3/k4: article + collocation] objectively hard work.

Although now there is a variety of technology [k4: countability] technologies that simplify [k4: agreement] simplifies the job of perfomators [k3: spelling / wrong word] performers, we should respect the effort of those creative people and follow some rules like keeping silence, not eating while watching plays not [k5: missing punctuation / syntactic cohesion] , so as not to disturb them. / Although there are now various technologies that simplify performers’ work, we should still respect their effort and follow certain rules, such as keeping quiet and not eating while watching plays, so as not to disturb them.

performator / perfomator / perfomators [k3: repetition of the same wrong lexical choice] performer / performers

Dear Mary,

the MSU tutors still don't make public their scoring criteria, whish is why I have developed my own ones based on the standard scoring criteria in English olympiads and international exams such as IELTS, CAE and TOEFL. They are as follows:

Assessment criteria (percent-based)

максимальный результат: 100%

Your score

Final:71/100

Summary

The interview discusses society at the Shakespeare's time [k4: grammar — wrong article and possessive structure] in Shakespeare’s time with Professor George Davies.

The speaker explains why drama was a popular form of art at this period [k4: grammar — wrong preposition] during this period and how did actors learn [k4: grammar — wrong word order in an indirect question] how actors learned to play [k5: punctuation / spacing] . Overall, the aim is to show the way the language was used in art in the sixteenth-century England [k3: awkward wording / k4: wrong article] how language was used in art in sixteenth-century England / how language functioned in the art of sixteenth-century England.

First, the interviewee reports that in his opinion [k5: punctuation — missing commas for a parenthetical phrase] , in his opinion, // the interviewee suggests that in the sixteenth century society in England was pre-literate, because literature wasn't [k1: style/register — contracted form] was not available for [k4: grammar — wrong preposition] to all people.

Next, they point out that people were expressing themselves mostly by speech , [k5: punctuation — wrong comma] and body language, which effected on [k3: wrong word / k4: wrong preposition] affected art; namely, drama was popular exactly by this reason [k3: unnatural wording] for exactly this reason.

They also describe that [k3: awkward wording] explain that there was no special way to learn acting, but students in schools studied by saying the information repeatedly, which shows how used to oratory practice [k3: unnatural wording] accustomed to oratorical practice / used to public speaking practice they were.

In addition, theatres of Elizabeth's the First epoch [k3: unnatural wording] the Elizabethan era are mentioned to demonstrate that actors had to be loud to performance [k4: grammar — wrong form after infinitive marker] to perform, as it was held on the air [k4: grammar — wrong preposition and article] in the open air, surrounded by city [k4: grammar — missing article] the city with it's [k4: grammar — wrong form] its noisiness.

Finally, the speaker concludes that plays used to be mainly about social problems, government or revolution dilemmas. [k3: awkward wording] Plays mainly dealt with social problems and governmental or revolutionary dilemmas.

Taken together, these ideas present an illustration of [k3: awkward wording] an illustration of the relationship between language and art at the Shakespeare's time [k4: grammar — wrong article and possessive structure] in Shakespeare’s time.

Your score

Final: 62/100