A letter to a friend_VOSH_FINAL_2025

The Trouble

Dear friends,

I’m glad to finally write to you. You won’t believe where I’ve just been. I was in the future! /You won’t believe it—I’ve just returned from the future!

Do you remember my experimental time machine, guys? It finally worked! Walking on air after discovering [k3: inaccurate word choice] completing /assembling it / walking on air—it had finally come together -- I rushed to try it out [k3: redundant use of 'it'+ unclear reference] test the device. As I pressed the button, everything started spinning and transformed into something resembling a computer game. The world whirled around me, then pixelated into what felt like a virtual simulation. I found myself fifty years from now.

Just imagine! The whole sky looks like an electronic system, shining and beeping. It's AI ruling the world, sending signals to every person and robot. Imagine a skyline of humming frequencies and circuits in the clouds, all governed by AI.

How mesmerised I was when the AI addressed me directly! “Good afternoon,” it stated in electronic voice [k4] in an electronic voice, “how can I help you?” It greeted me in a tone as flat as a dial tone, yet eerily polite. Speechless for a split second, I asked it to show me the city.

THE AI took me to astounding skyscrapers, allmighty [k5: spelling mistake] almighty computers. We glided past towering spires and vast networks of blinking supercomputers. Suddenly I noticed a statue of a bear and couldn’t help but wonder why it was built [k4: sequence of tenses – past perfect needed to show earlier action] had been built. “Went extinct twenty years ago due to massive deforestation,” AI [k4: wrong zero article – "the" needed before a known entity] the AI explained monotonously. “Were honoured this way.”

“Guess they couldn’t bear it!” I chirped, though put off by this information. /I cracked a pun to lighten the mood: “Guess they couldn’t bear it!” “What? Why are you laughing, sir?” my digital companion didn’t understand the joke /“Why are you laughing, sir?” the AI asked, frozen. Guess I made it hang mid-joke.

It was then that I was struck. No matter how many times AI repeated its question, I, submerged under a ton of thoughts, couldn’t answer. /I froze too, realizing that in all its brilliance, AI couldn’t grasp a simple joke.

This journey, my friends, should teach us a lesson. Implementing technologies is wonderful and necessary, but we mustn’t forget about the significance of human feelings. If AI can’t understand people’s nature [k3: unclear/unnatural collocation] If AI cannot grasp human nature, it shouldn’t reign over them. /Technology should serve, not supplant, the essence of what makes us human.

I’ll round up [k3: inaccurate phrasal verb - 'round off' is meant] wrap up now. Time to sign off before the wires start missing me.

Best wishes,
Your Friend

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