Hello! [k1: style/register — too informal for a cover letter to a selection committee] Dear Selection Committee, My name is Uliana. I study at high school [k3: unnatural phrasing + k4: article/educational-stage construction] am a secondary-school student in Nizhny Novgorod.

I am writing to put forward my candidacy for taking part [k1: unnecessarily bureaucratic wording for this genre] apply to take part in the World Skills Championship as part of the Young Russian team of welders.

I am sure that the member [k4: wrong article + k3: inaccurate role noun — the applicant is not yet a team member] a candidate like me will be suitable [k1: overly assertive and imprecise phrasing] would be a good fit for your team. In fact, I have been keen on welding since my childhood. My grandfather was a professional welder and gave me a huge amount of useful skills [k3: unnatural collocation + k4: incorrect quantifier with the countable noun skills] taught me a wide range of valuable skills which I keep using today. When I was studying at high school [k2: unclear timeline — the opening says that the applicant is still a school student!] While at secondary school, I took part in several welding competitions and was a winner [A: underdeveloped evidence — identify the level of a genuine competition and the exact result].

Also, I would like to say why I have decided to apply for the Championship. [k2: redundant (лишний) block — the following sentences can present the reasons directly] First of all, I regard this competition as a great opportunity for getting ahead in my future welding career [k3: unnatural collocation + k2: illogical career stage — the career has not begun yet] an excellent opportunity to take an important step towards a career in welding. I have always dreamt of being [k3: repetitive first-person sentence opening] My long-term ambition is to become a qualified specialist in this sphere [k3: vague and less idiomatic word choice] this field. Secondly, being a winner of [k3: wordiness] winning the World Skill [k5: inaccurate reproduction of the competition name] World Skills Championship can provide me with studying at the most prestigious [k3: unnatural collocation + k4: incorrect verbal construction + k1: excessive overstatement] could strengthen my application to leading Russian universities. [k2: the claimed university benefit is too broad and is not explained or supported] I will be really amused [k3: inaccurate word choice — amused means entertained + k4: inappropriate conditional form] would be delighted if you allow me to be a participant of the competition and a member of your team [k3: unnatural selection collocation + k4: wrong preposition + k1: reader awareness] selected me to compete as a member of the Young Russian team. I am looking forward to be [k4: misuse of a verbal — look forward to requires a gerund] to working at the same team with [k4: wrong preposition + k3: unnatural phrasing] alongside industrious, skillful [k3: English-variant inconsistency — use BrE spelling consistently with dreamt] skilful and single-minded students [k3: potentially negative and inaccurate wording for prospective teammates] determined young welders. In addition, I will be able to send all my documents as soon as you have replied to my letter. [k2: weak sequencing and abrupt ending — application documents are normally supplied with the application or upon request] All required documents can be supplied immediately upon request. Thank you for considering my application.

The video is devoted to the system of Finnish education at schools [K3: unnatural and unnecessarily wordy noun phrase] Finland’s school education system. Several factors contributing to good quality of this country’s standard of teaching [K3: incompatible and redundant combination of quality and standard] the high standard of education in the country are discussed in the video.

One of them is the highly-qualified teachers [K3: unclear reference at the beginning of a new paragraph and unnatural noun phrase + K5: no hyphen is normally used after an adverb ending in -ly] these factors is Finland’s highly qualified teaching staff. For example, math [English-variant consistency: math is AmE; the corrected version follows BrE] maths teacher of the common Finnish school [K4: missing article + K3: unnatural way of identifying the teacher and school] one teacher at the Finnish school featured in the video has postgraduate qualifications and speaks five languages. Another reason for the big amount of well-educated specialists [K3: amount is not normally used with countable people; big and specialists are imprecise here] large number of well-qualified teachers is that the teacher profession [K3: unnatural noun combination] the teaching profession has always been sought after in Finland. Another reason why Finland attracts so many well-qualified teachers is that teaching has long been a highly sought-after profession there.

Particularly, [K2: inappropriate linking word—the sentence introduces an additional feature rather than a specific example of the preceding point] In addition, Finnish schools have many facilities for children’s entertainment. [K1: the supporting example concerns only one school; avoid generalising unless the video explicitly applies this feature to Finnish schools as a whole + K3: 'recreational facilities' is more appropriate than 'facilities for entertainment'] the video highlights the recreational facilities available at the school it presents. For instance, that one which was showed in the video [K3: unclear reference + K4: incorrect past participle of show] the school shown in the video has a wide range of outdoors and indoors activities such as basketball and football courts, hockey rink, ping-pong tables and rooms where students are able to play video games [K3: outdoors and indoors are used incorrectly as adjectives; the examples given are facilities rather than activities + K4: missing articles + K3: a football field is normally called a pitch in BrE] indoor and outdoor recreational facilities, including basketball courts, a football pitch, a hockey rink, table-tennis tables and rooms where pupils can play video games.

[K0/K1: The final paragraph in a summary should synthesise the video’s content at first and only after that describe its effect on you, if required.] Overall, the video presents highly qualified teachers, the prestige of the teaching profession and well-equipped schools as important features of Finland’s education system

All in all, this video educated me on many interesting facts [K3: unnatural collocation—people are educated about a subject rather than normally educated on individual facts] taught me many interesting facts about Finnish schools. I’m sure this material helps to raise the awareness of what quality of education should be like [K3: unnecessary article before awareness and unnatural expression] helps raise awareness of what high-quality education can look like and shows how important the level of teaching standard is [K3: unnatural and redundant noun phrase] how important high teaching standards are.

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Given text [K4: missing article + K3: the source is a video, not a written text] The video aims to raise readers’ [K3: inaccurate audience reference for a video] viewers’ awareness of Britain’s economic success and reasons which fostered [K3: unnatural collocation and imprecise relative construction] the factors that fostered the country’s development. //The video examines the factors behind Britain’s economic success. To support his assertions, [K3: unnecessarily forceful wording; the gendered pronoun should only be used if the speaker has been identified] this argument, the author provides [K3: an author does not normally “provide attributes as evidence”] narrator cites the UK’s geographical attributes [K3: possible but unnatural in this context] geographical advantages and its natural reserves [K3: natural resources is the general term; reserves refers to identified quantities of particular resources] natural resources as evidence.

As for geographical attributes, it is underscored that [K3: unnecessarily impersonal passive construction] the narrator emphasises that Great Britain’s uneven [K3: inaccurate adjective for the shape of a coastline] irregular coastline offers nation protection [K4: missing article + K3: unnatural collocation] offers the nation protection from European rivals, who [K5: the comma creates an inappropriate non-defining relative clause] that could challenge [K3: possible but less natural than threaten with independence] threaten its independence.

Surrounding the integration of British Iles, waters which they are washed by serve as an implement for foreign invasion. [K2: the sentence contradicts the preceding claim because an implement for invasion would facilitate rather than prevent an attack + K3: integration, washed by and implement do not express the intended meaning + K5: Iles is misspelled] The waters surrounding Britain serve as a barrier to foreign invasion.

Regarding island’s natural diversion, [K4: missing article + K3: diversion does not mean natural wealth or resources] the island’s natural resources, the author draws attention to reserves which are covered by the surrounding waters  offshore reserves lying beneath the surrounding seabed. Being among the most significant inner factors, [K2: natural resources are not normally described as inner factors] As two of the country’s most significant domestic resources, coal and oil propelled Britain to lead [K3: unnatural verb pattern] helped Britain take the lead in the Industrial Revolution.

Overall, the analysis reveals an intricate interplay between country’s topography’s wealth and its international economic dominance. [K4: missing article before country + K3: malformed double possessive and an illogical attribution of wealth to topography] how the country’s geographical advantages and natural-resource wealth contributed to its global economic dominance.