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Dear Chris. [k5: punctuation -- No full stop here. A comma is needed] Dear Chris,

Thanks for your letter. It was lovely to hear from you again. Sorry for not writing so long— I’ve been busy with my exams. Great to hear, that [k5: unnecessary comma] Great to hear that you talk about Russian scientiste [k5: spelling] scientists and Russian inventions at school.

You ask me about what is the most famous Rossian invention, why is it important to study science at school аnd what Russian scientist I think a foreigner should learn about, and why [k5: formatting/run-on sentence + k5: spelling] what the most famous Russian invention is, why it is important to study science at school, and which Russian scientist I think a foreigner should learn about and why.[k2/k1: логичность высказывания / раскрытие темы -- Нельзя переписывать все вопросы друга слово в слово! Нужно сформулировать тему вопросов кратко] Russian scientists and their inventions

Well, for your first question: It is a radio. [k4: wrong article -- Use 'the' with concepts] the radio. It was invented by Aleksandr Popov in the end of [k4: wrong preposition] at the end of the 19th century.

As for your second question I can say, that it is really important, because we need to know who invented a lot of different things, what changed our lives. [k5: comma splice  + k4: pronoun agreement, also k1: low register/informal -- 'a lot of' is too conversational for academic writing.] As for your second question, I think it is very important because we should know about the people who invented various things that changed our lives/ , which changed our lives cardinally.

Concerning your third question, i think, that [k5: capitalization + unnecessary comma] Concerning your third question, I think that foreigners should learn about Popov, Mendeleev and Kovalevskaya. Popov -because he made a radio, what was a sensation and a really interesting thing, what changed our lives. [k5: punctuation + k4: wrong relative pronoun + k3: repetition+k2-logic --В английском нельзя выделять придаточные в отельные предложения! ] Popov should be studied because he invented the radio, which was a sensation and significantly changed our lives. Mindeleev-[k5: spelling]Mendeleev— because he was really genius scientist, who invented the table of Mendeleev, where was all of chemistry elements and their classifications. [k4: article missing + k3: unnatural phrasing + k4: wrong verb form] is of great importance at school because he was a truly genius scientist who created the Periodic Table, which organized all the chemical elements. Kovalevskaya because [k5: punctuation] Kovalevskaya should be subject to research as well, since it is a first women in Russia and Europe, who became___professor of maths. [k4: article + incorrect number + k4: preposition] she was the first woman in Russia and Europe to become a professor of Mathematics.

By the way, you write that you have bought a gift for your brother. What is it? How you will present it him? What you think about your gift? [k4+K4: incorrect word order in questions] What is it? How will you present it to him? What do you think about your gift? How much is the gift?

Well, I have to go now. I promised my Mom to walk the dog.

Write back soon!

Best wishes,
Vera

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