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May, 11, 2026

Currently, I am doing a project on the advantages of living in the countryside in Zetland. While doing the project, I have found a table illustrating the results of a survey conducted among people in Zetland. The data will be analysed and conclusions will be drawn by me [k1: style/register — unnecessary personal reference in an impersonal report] . //The data will be analysed and relevant conclusions will be drawn below.

According to the table, while answering the question "What are the advantages of living in countryside [k4: wrong article] the countryside in Zetland?", 26% of the respondents [k2: missing logical element] chose the option "Less noise from neighbours". Additionally, more sunlight and fresh air is [k4: subject-verb agreement] are a pros [k4: wrong article + k4: incorrect number form] an advantage of living in the countryside for 13% of the surveyed people. //According to the table, 26% of respondents chose less noise from neighbours, while 13% mentioned more sunlight and fresh air as an advantage of living in the countryside.

It is worth mentioning the difference between the options "Less pollution" and "Friendlier people around" in the results of the survey. The former is almost four times as common as [k3: imprecise wording — specify that it was selected by more respondents] as frequently selected as the latter. //The former was chosen by almost four times as many respondents as the latter.

This can be explained by the fact that pollution is a more objective and obvious problem of living in the urban area [k4: wrong article / number form] urban areas, as cities ! [k2: incomplete / unclear idea] where pollution is usually more noticeable, whereas the amount of welcoming and kind people probably doesn't [k1: no short forms in formal writing] does not depend on the type of an area [k3: unnatural phrasing] place. //This difference may be explained by the fact that pollution is usually more noticeable in urban areas, whereas people’s friendliness does not necessarily depend on whether they live in a city or in the countryside.

Unfortunately, one can face a problem when living in the countryside. For instance, there might be problems with public transport in the rural area [k4: wrong article / number form] rural areas, so if a person doesn't [k1: no short forms in formal writing] does not have a car, they may have no opportunity to commute to a nearby city to make purchases or work there. //A possible issue is poor public transport: without a car, residents may find it difficult to commute to a nearby city for work or shopping.

A solution to this problem can be or asking [k4: incorrect structure + k3: unnatural phrasing] could be to ask neighbours to share their car or going [k4: wrong verb form / parallel structure] to go by bycicle [k5: wrong spelling] bicycle. [k2: weak relevance — “going by bicycle” may not solve the problem if the nearby city is far away] //A more practical solution would be to improve local bus services or organise a car-sharing system among residents.

To conclude, I believe that life in countryside [k4: wrong article] the countryside has its bright and dark sides. [k1: task achievement — the conclusion should give a clearer opinion on life in the countryside, not only a balanced statement] It might be a peaceful life without rush [k4: wrong article] the rush and noise of a city; however, it can also be hard if you need a variety of services, entertainment and job vacancies. //In my opinion, life in the countryside is attractive because it offers cleaner air, less noise and a calmer atmosphere, although limited transport and services can make it less convenient for some people.

May 16, 2026

Currently, I am doing a project on the jobs most popular with young people in Zetland.Currently, I am doing a project on which jobs are most popular among young people in Zetland. While doing the project , I found a pie chart ullistrating [k5: spelling] illustrating the results of a survey conducted among Zetlanders. The data will be analysed and conclusions will be drawn. Currently, I am doing a project on the jobs that are most popular among young people in Zetland. While working on the project// As part of my project, I found //have found a pie chart illustrating the results of a survey conducted among Zetlanders. The data will be analysed and relevant conclusions will be drawn.

According to the pie chart, 22% of the respondents consider a construction worker the most popular job in Zetland. According to the pie chart, 22% of the respondents consider construction work the most popular occupation in Zetland.Additionaly [k5: spelling] Additionally, "A sales representative" [k5: capitalization; the option is part of the sentence, so the article should not be capitalized unless it is an exact chart label] "a sales representative" is chosen by 18% of the surveyed people. According to the pie chart, the largest proportion of respondents, 22%, consider construction work the most popular occupation among young people in Zetland. Additionally, 18% of those surveyed chose the option “a sales representative”.

It is worth mentioning the difference between the options "A software engineer" and "A coach". The former was chosen by almost two times [k3: collocation; “twice as many” is a more natural comparative phrase] twice as many respondents as the latter [k1: figures missing!] -- ...% and ...% respectively. This can be explained by the fact that IT sphere [k3: lexical mistake/collocation; in formal English, “sector/field/industry” is more natural] the IT sector is highly perspective [k3: lexical mistake; “perspective” is a noun/adjective meaning “viewpoint/related to perspective”, not “promising”] promising, because technologies [k4: wrong noun form; “technology” is normally uncountable when used generally] technology are [k4: subject-verb agreement] is used in medicine, cosmos exploration [k3: lexical mistake/collocation] space exploration, science etc [k5: punctuation] , etc. Therefore, software engineers are in great demand on the job martket [k5: spelling] market and many people choose to have a career in this occupation. A coach, [k1: figure missing!], at...%,  on the contrary [k3: linking phrase; “by contrast” is more suitable for comparison, while “on the contrary” is used to contradict a previous statement] by contrast, is not such a modern and well-paid job. It is also worth comparing the options “a software engineer” and “a coach”. The former was chosen by almost twice as many respondents as the latter -- ...% and ...% respectively . This may be explained by the fact that the IT sector is highly promising, as technology is widely used in medicine, space exploration, science, and many other fields. Therefore, software engineers are in great demand on the job market, which may encourage many young people to pursue a career in this field. By contrast, coaching, at ...%,  may seem less stable or less financially attractive to some respondents.

Unfortunately, one can face a problem when choosing jobs [k3: lexical choice; the context refers to choosing one career path or occupation] a job / a career path. For instance, they [k4: pronoun consistency; after “one”, use “one” or rewrite the sentence in the plural. But in this context we end up with a tautology in this case...] one might doubt whether to work part-time or full-time. Unfortunately, young people may face a serious dilemma when choosing a career path. For instance, they may be unsure whether to work part-time or full-time. A solution to this problem can be thinking about your prioritites: whether you need to have time for your family or hobbies or you need to earn more money and want to dedicate yourself to a job. This problem can be solved by carefully weighing personal priorities: spending more time with family and pursuing hobbies, or earning more money and focusing more seriously on career development. A solution to this problem can be thinking about your prioritites: whether you need to have time for your family or hobbies or you need to earn more money and want to dedicate yourself to a job [k3/k5: repetition and spelling; there is an overabundance of “you/your”, which makes the sentence sound repetitive and less formal. Also, “prioritites” is misspelled.] your priorities: whether you need to have time for  family or hobbies or need to earn more money and want to focus on a career. This problem can be solved by carefully weighing personal priorities: having more time for family and hobbies, or earning more money and focusing more seriously on career development.

To conclude, I believe that nowadays the most popular job is a designer [k1: task achievement / possible contradiction with the chart; if the chart shows that “construction worker” has the highest percentage, the conclusion should not claim that “designer” is the most popular job unless this is presented as your broader personal opinion and clearly explained]  design is becoming an increasingly attractive career. Websites, clothes, cafes, interior [k4: wrong noun form; a plural list requires “interiors”] interiors - [k5: punctuation; use an em dash for parenthetical emphasis] — everything that surrounds us everyday [k5: spelling/word form; “everyday” is an adjective, while “every day” means “daily”] every day was [k4: tense/aspect; the sentence refers to a present result or general fact] has been / is designed by someone. To conclude, although construction work appears to be the most popular option according to the chart, I believe that design is also becoming an increasingly attractive career. Websites, clothes, cafés, and interiors — in other words, almost everything that surrounds us every day — has been designed by someone.

k1[3]k2[3]k3[2]k4[3]k5[1]=12/13 out of 14

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May 20, 2026

Dear Bill,

Thank you for your email. I'm always glad to hear from you.

In the email [k3: less natural reference; since you are replying to Bill directly, “in your email” sounds more personal and appropriate.] In your email you asked me about my career. Of course, I have already chosen my careeer [k5: spelling] career, thanks to teachers for career-guidance [k3/k4: unnatural phrasing and incorrect noun structure; “career guidance” is usually unhyphenated as a noun phrase, and the sentence needs a clearer source of help.] thanks to my teachers’ career guidance, which was very helpful. Personally, I'm going to work in international relations as an abmassador [k5: spelling] ambassador, because this job is well-paid and relevant nowadays [k3: lexical choice/collocation; a job is more naturally described as “in demand”, “prestigious” or “important” rather than “relevant”.] in demand nowadays. On top of that, while working as an ambassador you have to live abroad, which is [k4: tense/aspect; “has been” is better because the dream started in childhood and is still relevant now.] has been my childhood dream, making this job appealing to me. In your email, you asked me about my career. Of course, I have already chosen my future career, largely thanks to my teachers’ career guidance, which was very helpful. Personally, I am going to work in international relations as an ambassador because this job is well-paid, prestigious and in demand nowadays. On top of that, ambassadors often have to live abroad, which has been my childhood dream, so this career seems especially appealing to me.

By the way, in the letter [k2: cohesion; the text starts as a reply to an email, so “your email” is more consistent than “the letter”.] your email you mentioned that you have lived in the USA your whole life, but you would really like to travel to other countries. Which country would you like to visit? Have you already got a plan to travel there? [k3: unnatural phrasing; “make travel plans” is a more natural collocation.] Have you already made any travel plans? How long will you stay abroad, [k5: punctuation; no comma is needed before this short “if”-clause at the end of the sentence.] if you have a chance? By the way, in your email you mentioned that you have lived in the USA your whole life, but you would really like to travel abroad. Which country would you like to visit? Have you already made any travel plans? How long would you like to stay there if you had the chance?

Sorry, my mom needs some help with cooking dinner. Write back soon!

Best wishes,
Masha

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Dear Robert,

Thank you for your email. I'm always glad to hear from you.

In the email [k3: less natural reference; since this is a reply to Robert, “your email” sounds more personal and appropriate.] In your email you asked me about changes in my city. Undoubtedly, it has changed [k2: illogical connector -- It is not clear why 'unfortunatley'] It has undoubtedly changed a lot since my childhood. In your email, you asked me about changes in my city. It has definitely changed a lot since my childhood.

For example, it has become twice bigger [k3: collocation; the standard comparative structure is “twice as + adjective + as / twice as big”.] twice as big and thus noisier, but on the other side [k3: wrong linking phrase; the natural phrase for contrast is “on the other hand”.] hand, now it's one of the most modern cities in Russia! I have ambiguous [k3: lexical choice; “ambiguous” usually means unclear or having more than one meaning, while feelings about changes are usually “mixed”.] mixed feelings about those [k3: reference/cohesion; “these changes” sounds more natural because the changes have just been mentioned.] these changes, but in general I love them. For example, it has become twice as big and therefore much noisier; on the other hand, it is now one of the most modern cities in Russia. I have mixed feelings about these changes, but in general I like them.

Due to increasing population in my city [k4/k3: article and collocation; “population” needs an article here, and “the growing population” sounds more natural.] the growing population of my city I have more friends who live nearby, who have moved from the countryside [k2: unclear reference/cohesion; the second “who” makes the sentence clumsy and slightly unclear.] as many people have moved here from the countryside. Thanks to the growing population of my city, I now have more friends living nearby, as many people have moved here from the countryside.

In the email [k3: less natural reference; “in your email” is more appropriate in a personal reply.] In your email you also mentioned that your mom has won a cooking comtetition [k5: spelling] competition. Congratulions [k5: spelling] Congratulations! What does your mom love cooking [k3/k4: verb pattern; after “love” both “cooking” and “to cook” are possible, but in this direct question “love to cook” sounds more natural.] to cook? Was it her first time to participate [k3/k4: unnatural verb pattern after “first time”; “first time participating / taking part” is more natural.] participating in a cooking comtetition [k5: spelling] competition? How did your mom prepare for this competition? In your email, you also mentioned that your mom had won a cooking competition. Congratulations! What does your mom love to cook? Was it her first time participating in such a competition? How did she prepare for it?

Sorry, now I need to go, because my sister wants me to play with her. Write back soon! Sorry, I have to go now because my sister wants me to play with her. Write back soon!

Yours,
Mary

May, 23, 2026

Currently, I am doing a project on what museums teenagers like visiting in Zetland. While doing [k3: tautology] working on the progect [k5: spelling] project, I have found a pie chart illustrating the results of a survey conducted among teenagers in Zetland. The data will be analysed and conclusions will be drawn.

According to the pie chart, while answering the question "What museums do teenagers like visiting in Zetland?", [k2/k3: awkward sentence structure; the phrase makes the sentence unnecessarily heavy. It is better to report the survey result directly.] when asked what museums they liked visiting in Zetland, 70% of the respondents chose "Interactive museums", making it [k2: unclear reference; “it” may refer either to the option or to museums. “This” is clearer.] this the most popular option. Additionally, historical museums are considered appealing to teenagers in Zetland by 8% of the surveyed adolescents [k3/k4: unnatural passive structure; the percentage should be the subject of the sentence.] 8% of the surveyed adolescents consider historical museums appealing. According to the pie chart, when asked what museums they liked visiting in Zetland, 70% of the respondents chose "interactive museums", which makes this the most popular option. Additionally, 8% of the surveyed adolescents consider historical museums appealing.

It is worth mentioning the difference between the options "Science museums" and "Art galleries". The former is six times [k1: factual/data interpretation mistake; 18% is not six times as much as 2%, but nine times as much.] nine times as frequently chosen as the latter, at 18% and 2% respectively. This can be explained by the fact that science is a fast-growing field, as new inventions stimulate the progress of our civilization. Art, by contrast, is not as practical as science and therefore might be undervalued. On top of that, to love art one should have the sense of beauty [k3/k4: article and collocation; the natural expression is “a sense of beauty” or “an appreciation of beauty”.] a sense of beauty. It is worth mentioning the difference between the options “science museums” and “art galleries”. The former was chosen nine times as often as the latter, at 18% and 2% respectively. This may be explained by the fact that science is a fast-growing field, with new inventions driving the development of modern civilization. Art, by contrast, may seem less practical than science and is therefore sometimes undervalued. Moreover, appreciating art usually requires a developed sense of beauty.

Unfortunately, a problem can arise with visiting museums. For example, one might get lost in a big museum. To solve this problem this person [k3: unnecessary and unnatural reference; the phrase makes the sentence sound clumsy.] , visitors can ask passers-by [k3: lexical choice; “passers-by” usually refers to people in the street, not people inside a museum.] people nearby or the museum's workers [k3: collocation; the natural phrase is “museum staff”.] museum staff how to find the hall she or he is looking for [k3: awkward pronoun use; it is better to avoid “she or he” here.] they are looking for or the exit. Unfortunately, some visitors may get lost in large museums. To solve this problem, they can ask somebody nearby or museum staff how to find the hall they need or the exit.

To conclude, I believe that visiting museums or art galleries is important in teenagers' life [k4: wrong number; the plural possessive “teenagers’” requires the plural noun “lives”.] lives. The reason for that is that it broadens their horizons and makes them more intelligent. To conclude, I believe that visiting museums and art galleries plays an important role in teenagers’ lives because it broadens their horizons and helps them become more knowledgeable.

Letter

Dear Bill,

Thank you for the email [k3: I have discussed it with my Englilsh-speaking friends and theys say that using 'this' is less natural wording; in a personal reply, “your email” sounds warmer and more appropriate, insote of the repetition of 'you(r)'.] your email. I'm always glad to hear from you.

In your email [k3: And this is where you can switch to 'the email'] the email [k5: punctuation; a comma is needed after the introductory phrase.], you asked me about celebrities in Russia. In my opinion, if you choose to make a project on famous people from this country [k2/k3: cohesion and wording; “this country” is slightly detached, while “Russia” is clearer. Also, Sakharov is not a celebrity in the usual entertainment sense, but a famous scientist and public figure.] famous people from Russia, you should definitely write about Andrey Sakharov. In your email, you asked me about famous people in Russia. In my opinion, if you choose to do a project on well-known Russian public figures, you should definitely write about Andrey Sakharov.

As far as I know, he is [k4: tense; Andrey Sakharov is a historical figure, so Past Simple is needed.] was a physicist, and it was him [k4/k3: pronoun form and style; “it was he who” is grammatically formal, but the whole structure sounds heavy. A simpler structure is better.] he who created [k3/k1: lexical and factual precision; “helped develop” is safer and more accurate than “created” because such weapons are developed by teams of scientists.] helped develop the first hydrogen bomb in the Soviet Union. Besides, he participated in the invention of the nuclear bomb in this country [k2/k3: unclear and repetitive wording; “this country” is vague, and the idea repeats the previous sentence.] was also involved in Soviet nuclear research. As far as I know, he was a physicist who helped develop the first Soviet hydrogen bomb and made a major contribution to nuclear research.

Personally, I think he made a big contribution to the peace of ex-socialist countries [k3/k2: awkward collocation and unclear meaning; “contribution to peace” is possible, but “peace of countries” is not natural. The idea should be expressed more carefully.] security of the former socialist countries, because (they could be exploded by the bombs of NATO and some peoples could simply die and dissapear forever.) [k1/k2/k3/k5: logic, wording, punctuation and spelling; countries cannot be “exploded”, “peoples” is wrong here, “dissapear” is misspelled, and brackets are not appropriate in this letter.] they could have been attacked with nuclear weapons, which might have led to devastating consequences for millions of people. The inventions of Andrey Sakharov (his inventions*) [k5/k2: unnecessary bracketed note; it should be removed from the final version.] became the defence against a nuclear war [k3: collocation; “served as a deterrent against nuclear war” is more natural and precise.] a deterrent against nuclear war. Personally, I think Sakharov’s scientific work played an important role in strengthening his country’s security because nuclear weapons were seen as a deterrent against a possible attack. However, he is also remembered for his later human-rights activism and his efforts to promote peace.

In your email [k5: punctuation; a comma is needed after the introductory phrase.], you mentioned the interesting wildlife TV programme you've watched [k4/k3: tense choice; if the programme was watched at a specific completed time before writing the email, Past Simple sounds more natural.] you watched. What types of animals has it been telling about [k4/k3: wrong tense and unnatural verb choice; programmes “are about”, “show” or “tell viewers about” something.] was it about? Was it tedious [k3: not very accurate adjective. 'Tedious' is related to tasks, work, routine, not entrtainmetns] boring or interesting? When was it released? In your email, you mentioned an interesting wildlife TV programme you watched. What animals was it about? Did you find it exciting? When was it released?

Sorry, I need to go, [k5: punctuation;  here 'the clause of reason gives essential, thus, inseperable information, so no comma should be used.] because my owl is starving. Write back soon! Sorry, I need to go because my owl is starving. Write back soon!

Yours,
Mary

Do not usually put a comma before “because” when the reason follows naturally and directly. A comma may be used if there is a clear pause, if the reason is added as an afterthought, or if the because-clause is long and explanatory.

Dear Customer Support Team,

I am writing to bring an issue about [k3: unnatural collocation] report an issue with my robo dog, which I purchased around a year ago. //I am writing to report an issue with my robo dog, which I purchased around a year ago.

Firstly, I encountered a speech recognition problem, and the dog often fails to respond to commands. I think the main issue is with the microphone. Moreover, the dog started charging more slowly than expected. The manual said that [k1: style/register — manuals and written instructions are usually referred to in the present tense] The manual states/says that I need to change a battery [k3: inaccurate article/use] the battery, but I do not have enough experience and I am scared to replace it myself. //According to the manual, the battery needs to be replaced, but I do not have enough experience to do this myself.

My warranty period has expired.

My warranty period has expired. However, [k2: illogical connector — the following sentence is a request despite the expired warranty, so a concessive structure should be integrated more naturally] Nevertheless, is it possible to send my pet to the repair service [k3: unnatural collocation] to a repair centre for troubleshooting? //Although the warranty period has expired, would it still be possible to send the robo dog to a repair centre for troubleshooting?

Сould [k5: wrong character/font — Cyrillic “С” instead of Latin “C”] Could you please let me know how long the repair would take and what the approximate cost would be?

I look forward to your response.

Sincerely,
Dzmitry Shved